the sun rise

My father the sun

Said he will no longer work

Till you will love me

Reviews

[Thomas W Case]

Beautiful and pure in its brevity.

[Snow_]

Thank you so much...

[Brandy]

Different, yet delicate are your thoughts.

[Snow_]

Thank you so much....Again Brandy

[AYVID N]

Oh yes, we need the love for the sunshine to return. Beautifully written.

[Snow_]

Thank you so much...Ayvid N

[Marie]

A lot said in a few words! Thank you for sharing, Snow...

[Snow_]

Thank you so much

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

it's a very thought-provoking poem. the sun is personified as a father. that he brings light into your world. but, he will only do so on the condition you love him. and how does one express that love? in words? in actions? in gratitude? this narrative really makes us re-examine our relationship to our parents. it is a poignant work.

[Snow_]

Okay this is quite humiliating but it was not that complicated....It is not like that....There was one subject Person1 and person1 his father is the sun....he wont rise up tilll the girl of person1 loves person1 back

[Dave W.]

I like this, the sun will longer rise until love is returned, that darkness when she doesn't love back, good stuff.

[Snow_]

Right you got it...Thank you