Lost pennies

All the lost pennies 

Gambled in the casino

Could buy me a yacht

Author's Note

No more addictions :D

Reviews

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

it is a cheeky poem that has a good moral. addictions, and i know many people who have them (as a matter of fact, i also smoke) and the money lost to them will surely never come back.
a bit of feedback: you use the word 'lost' twice. it's best not to repeat words in a haiku, because you only have 17 syllables. every word must count and leave an impression on the reader.

[Snow_]

Thanks again for your timely advice

[Snow_]

Can you rate me again? I will change it

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

just checked. it's much better! the word 'Gambled' carries a weight that makes the reader go 'oh no...' and now the final line has a distinctly sardonic and humorous ring to it.

[Snow_]

Thank you so much:D

[Snow_]

If i have not informed you yet i can not review you as your account is labeled as matured:D though i mistakenly said i am over 18

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

not all my works are mature. the story is, but the poems are for all ages.

[Snow_]

Ohhh thank you i will review them then:D

[emmajoygreen]

A good haiku. Cleverly thought.

[Snow_]

Thank you this is why i wont block you. You are super nice.

[Snow_]

Sorry If i did not:D

[emmajoygreen]

What is that supposed to mean? Try being polite and saying PLEASE

[Snow_]

Oh you forgot when you told me to block you? Was it you I might not have remembered correctly

[emmajoygreen]

Sorry, I have so much going on in my life, I just do not remember. Take care of yourself.

[Snow_]

Ohh allright thank you....I am so sorry...Same actually me too...Too much sadness...I will share a poem to brighten your day

[emmajoygreen]

Thank you!

[Snow_]

Welcome hope I made you smile

[Dave W.]

Snow I like the Haiku, you absolutly said it true. Thank you for sharing

[Snow_]

Its a senryu...Check out this one...its inspired by yours
"the sun rise"

[Snow_]

by your poem....Like the unrequited love

[Dave W.]

Which poem was it that inspired you? I will check out the sun rise

[Snow_]

https://www.writerscafe.org/writing/dtwalkex/2914537/ this one i think "her eyes"

[Dave W.]

Oh yeah, Snow i hope you have a great day

[Snow_]

you too sir