Personally I like the read-aloud sound of your poem, your meter count is song-like, the words themselves understood and no - you couldn't have done better. It has a heart.. so, for me, this is perfect. Why criticise for the sake of it!.
Posted 5 Days Ago
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5 Days Ago
Plss do not blame them. It was because i changed it 4 times already. I think this iteration looks in.. read morePlss do not blame them. It was because i changed it 4 times already. I think this iteration looks infinitely better.
5 Days Ago
Sorry I can not look to your profile. I am underaged but your poetry is for mature. Can not critique.. read moreSorry I can not look to your profile. I am underaged but your poetry is for mature. Can not critique.
5 Days Ago
It's fine. Thank you telling me. :)
2 Days Ago
Okay after reading a message they probably were(criticizing for the sake of it) or they do not know .. read moreOkay after reading a message they probably were(criticizing for the sake of it) or they do not know grammar, thanks
2 Days Ago
Take care of yourself, keep writing always, be happy - always. :)
first, loved the title. although, you could rewrite it as "No cage [can] contain songs."
"Could" refers to the past, which means that in the future it might be possible to contain a song in a cage!
If you use "can" in this sentence, it will mean "a cage never contained songs in the past, and will not do so in the future." I think that's what you wanted to say.
the poem itself is excellent. it uses symbolism effectively. I too want to be like that bird. as for grammar, you should put "?" at the very end; after "hope".
English grammar is very hard but you are quite a poet. I enjoyed reading this. it made me think how I should live my life. it made me feel like there is hope; that i can find happiness wherever i am.
I'm giving you a score of 70. but this is not because of the grammar errors. it's only because i prefer poems that are longer (remember, this is just my personal opinion).