As the Crows Gathered

As the Crows Gathered
By: Adam M. Snow
 
Surrounded by bodies of murder
the flocking and squawk arose.
Score of many rows on girder
feast of death drew the crows.
One to carry souls of many;
one onto life beyond life.
Yet was not the foe-of any-
to leave this world of strife.
 
The crows they flock,
they flock, they squawk;
flapping their wings tremendously.
They caw, they pecked,
they grew many in score
groups gathered more and more.
 
Blackened the sky with their endless flutter;
"But what of this?" I utter.
"My days are long now being nighted.
The crows around have united."
 
Feathers falling, covering the ground with black;
everywhere I look, it covers every crack.
The thought of death surrounds us all
before the crows, life will fall.
The ominous bank of crows like a cloud,
covers the world like an endless shroud.
Leaving I, overwhelm with fear
it is death lurking near.

 

The crows they gathered all in vast;
all is dark than a shadow cast.
They prey the lost and many more,
time has come for death to bore.

Author's Note

*NOTE*
1) This was an experimental poem, I was changing the rhyme scheme throughout.
2) Not many people know this but 'murder' also means a group of crows.

Reviews

[Becky C Strukamp]

I learned something new today. Thank you!!

Blackened the sky with their endless flutter;
"But what of this?" I utter.
"My days are long now being nighted.
The crows around have united."

Love that stanza. Enjoyed reading. You did very well with your experiment.

[Amila Jay]

Hmm...I sought have heard about crows and murder thing, but hey thanks for telling. Any way, this is a great write:-)

[Spookers]

I liked the wording. The imagery was good, too. Good job

[luke312]

Very Nice. I like this one alot I really do dark and interesting fast yet slow I like this one quite a bit. Very Well Done

[Dahlia Phoenix]

We learn something everyday don't we? lol

Crows have always been visualized in horror movies for some reason. They seem dangerous when they stare at you, memorizing your every action.

"Feathers falling, covering the ground with black;
everywhere I look, it covers every crack.
The thought of death surrounds us all
before the crows, life will fall."

Deeply dark and compelling. I love this.

[Daytonight]

Definitely an omnious feel to this one. Well done!

[Jupiter Jazz]

Interesting.
That's actually why I've always thought about writing about a flock of crows, because it's called a murder. Never could up with the lines though.

[Darksummerswind]

This is a unique poem and I like how you fit the rhyming in it.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

May be experimental but sometimes those can be the funnest and the best... and with this write you did great at being experimental. I love this. The crows show such imagery within this poem that you wrote, and as you also said in your author's note about the crows flock being like a murder is nice to know, different. Makes it all seem even more mysterious... there is beauty within nature. Very nice write, i enjoyed this a lot. :)

[T.W. Early]

This was an amazing poem! I could visualize the crows perfectly! Great Job!