Dreaming of My Eternal Humble Abode Beyond this World

Dreaming of My Eternal Humble Abode Beyond this World

By: Adam M. Snow

 

I close my eyes and vision a world in its pass,

Only I could see of its eternal mass:

Of the wind sparkling with gold,

As if a story unfold-

Of my fantasy coming true,

As I smell the morning dew.

 

I lay here in my ever sleep,

Awake but in dreaming heap.

I am royal; I am but a poor man,

Just living life, this lifeless span.

 

I speak my voice not that of hate,

In this world consumed by fate.

Love and joy rules this realm,

And I still overwhelm.

There's beauty as far as the eyes can see-

This be a place built for me.

Reviews

[LochnezzMonster]

I almost feel myself set in the medieval times as I read this because it brings up a problem I usually see in works of that time period (And the way you write it, sounds like it has come out of the mouth of someone in Pride and Prejudice) - Perhaps a rich man who feels as if there's more to life than what everyone years for- money. I don't know if that was the intent you had in mind but I definitely see that here. I love the middle stanza. It's so relateable and real- brilliantly done, Adam.

[Azariek]

Great flow and great rhyming, Adam. A beautiful poem, as always.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Very nice, i love the rhyming... really great flow. I enjoyed this.

[Jazique]

Awe how nice as it all seemed so peaceful as you at the end find the place built for you. Well done with descriptions and all as a flow of words were made in a short poem. I enjoyed the whole"I speak my voice not that of hate,
In this world consumed by fate.
Love and joy rules this realm,
And I still overwhelm.
There's beauty as far as the eyes can see-
This be a place built for me."
As Ta'Shandra as to me it spoke and in return I speak bravo.

[T.W. Early]

This was very good. Liked the rhyming and everything!

[Tasha]

This was really good Adam.
"I speak my voice not that of hate,
In this world consumed by fate.
Love and joy rules this realm,
And I still overwhelm.
There's beauty as far as the eyes can see-
This be a place built for me."
This was wonderful. Great job.
♥ Ta'Shandra