Soul Sacrifice

Soul Sacrifice

By: Adam M. Snow

 

I speak from a stolen breath,

Echo of it lost, on sighs.

With night going yonder,

My cries filled stagnant air,

As tears fall on tainted ground.

My wakeful soul knows no bound,

But though I live this life of bane,

I can't, O' I cannot explain,

Still I speak from muted tongue,

Only I could hear my call.

I live because I must, I feel it just,

Sacrifice even dignity to survive,

But though I give, I give not to me,

I remain the shadow of worlds to see.

A ghost of past shadowing future,

But what I hold dear, I cannot grasp.

I reach for what I cannot get,

But to live on knowing I'm exiled,

I'll forever live on, constantly dreaming.

Reviews

[Farrah Grahm]

The despair is almost palpable in this writing. Impressive

[Pumpkinspice]

This is sad, and wonderfully penned. Love the rhyme scheme. Good luck in my contest. Will add clappies after judging. Pumpkin:)

[Amera]

A wonderful poem that captivates the reader with your introspection. IMHO, the center alignment does not do it justice and it could be divided into stanzas to make it easier for the reader. Nicely done!

Love,
Amera

[Awdures]

Really enjoyed the content, one niggle with me though is the over use of the I pro noun in poetry. You only need to inroduce the narrative as first person once, cull some of the I's and sort the caps at the beginning of each line and you're there!

[Emily B]

breath instead of breathe

[luke312]

Very nice. The most one can do is live even if it is for ones self. Very righteous read there are many that can relate to it

[.quan.011.]

This poem is very good. It well written and I really suck at giving poem review sorry. it is a good poem.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is very good. To look into a human mind and could can bring out things better staying hidden and lost. I like the emotion and the desire in this poem.
"I live because I must, I feel it just,
Sacrifice even dignity to survive, "
Sometime just to survive leave us empty and missing the real valuable things in a life. I like the ending to the outstanding poem.
Coyote