Requiem

Requiem
By: Adam M. Snow

The darkness blooms on this cold still night,
Loneliness I wait; I wait for time to take flight,
But loneliness I wait; lost forevermore,
Bounded by fate of my tomorrow, dying for,
Lost forevermore like my burden upon dreams,
Like my past behind me, so it seems, so it seems.
Awaken now by agony and greed,
But still alone in this time of need,
Alone, with but one desire,
To fly free, not stoke the fire.
Requiem on this night upon dreams,
Like my past behind me, so it seems, so it seems.
A requiem like any other, sung upon dreams, so it seems.
Broken through turmoil and bliss,
I give my dying kiss to a broken reflection,
A reflection, shattered across time,
By my one tormented prime.
Like my woes overthrown by ageless affliction,
But my dying curse, my only addiction,
Lost forevermore like my burden upon dreams,
Like my past behind me, so it seems, so it seems.

Reviews

[Dalebear]

Oh wow this is amazing.

[luke312]

This was exceptional.

[HappyOddGirl]

Again, strong and emotive writing. It seems to me that the meaning of your work is carried by a series of powerful words placed throughout the poem, rather than having a narrative structure as such. It's effective. :)

I think it works even better in the video. I find it easier to take in the meaning in bite-size pieces. :D Had you considered splitting it into stanzas, or was the choice of form deliberate? :)

[Hollow Man]

Had to play Mozart for this one. Anything titled Requiem, requires it. That said, you def play with the poesque style here and do it well. great write.

[Matthew Smith]

Oh, wow. This was really good!

[SilentDreamer]

Nicely written and I like the little video that goes along with it

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I agree with a previous statement that this feels like a work by Poe, which is one of my favourite writers.
Great work here.

[T.W. Early]

This is a great poem so it seems, so it seems. loved the dark heart of it. great job.

[Jenny Nelson]

Has quite the E.A. Poe feel to it, and I love it. Such dark realization and honesty. Leaves an eerie feel. Excellent!

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Wow, this is amazing. Great flow and rhyme, I really enjoyed this. Nice work!!