Beneath Still Waters

Beneath Still Waters
By: Adam M. Snow

Beneath still waters lie lost memories,
Of sullied dreams cast into seas.
Yet mine lost in a thousand days,
By my foreknown separate ways,
And only by the blood moon,
Will it shine ever so soon.

But mine, shattered by my past,
As my essence surpassed,
Tormented by my woes,
Like the crows upon my flesh.

Tender life of putrid mesh,
Cast down upon my burden.
But lest I suffer more,
For mercy is what I plead for.
To atone for what my sins may cost,
But I reluctant for myself now lost.
Willingly I encumber my future wonder,
Regrets now my only feeling,
I fallen, now kneeling.

Melancholy was my one desire,
Now I cast aside the pit of fire.
Awaken now my wayward dream,
And myself, I now redeem.
On this night of vespertine,
My untimely death was intervene.

Laying here in peaceful slumber,
No more worries should I encumber.
Weeping may endure the night,
My soul, my life becomes the light,
Open now my vastness heart,
Cometh tomorrow a brand new start.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

"For mercy is what I plead for.
To atone for what my sins may cost,"
The poem words and story is amazing. I had to read a few times. Many lines I like in this emotional ride in your words. Sometime all we can do is ask for forgiveness and walk away with the wisdom. Everything we do we will pay for in the end. A very good ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[luke312]

Very Very Nice. It has a good flow and great depiction. It is liked a lot .

[kasanova]

I like it. I like it a lot.

[Angela]

What a wonderful read. The same lines that touched C.P leapt off the page at me and straight into my heart. "Mercy is what I plead for to atone for what my sins may cost." Incredibly powerful! And only by the blood red moon.... So true.

[HappyOddGirl]

Interesting structure - the use of rhyme in the middle of lines works well. :)

The emotion comes through strongly - the journey from confusion and pain to hope. :)

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this was so well expressed...
an outstanding emotive write...
"But lest I suffer more,
For mercy is what I plead for.
To atone for what my sins may cost,
But I reluctant for myself now lost."
-Great poem...

[Labtoad]

I've just read again. This really is powerful...the hopelessness, then self redemption...it feels very complete, whole

[Labtoad]

The feeling...a pit in the stomach...heavy heart...survival...this was beautiful and very well done

[Steven Cetta]

It's life as we know it. It's what we try to avoid from life but somehow we run right into it. Lovely poem. I like it and the way it's written.

[Cherrie]

The grace of Solomon meets the power of Poe in this crystal clear picture of a man’s soul and a life so lived. It was wonderful

[Dream Weaver]

Engaging.. Masterfully scripted imagery.
Sullen and yet poignant .. Nicely done…