She became My Gallows

She became My Gallows

Written by Adam M. Snow

What of this!?

Her sweet madness beautiful as snow,

that by starlight, the rushes lean over her wide!

The intoxication of her insanity draws me close.

Her voice, calling out my name;

-haunting me.

 

The moonlight pours out upon her -

her wickedness is shown, who dreams with

 - a nest of mad kisses; a thousand years sad regrets.

She is my agony -

my cage -

my demise.

My loss of sanity is due her.

 

She is haunting,

such madness is this?

I cared nothing for all,

she is my breath, I can't live without.

My essence,

- sighing around her where the stars are sleeping.

The scented twilight, I hung there.

 

She became my gallows -

my wandering noose -

my demise -

the fall of a tragic poet.

She is the bearer of my heart, locked away;

I am nothing.

 

 

I am nothing

but a man locked in chains,

who bears no voice;

a victim to her madness

- her bitter sweet madness, beautiful as snow.

 

She stole my heart -

my voice -

my name.

I am her insanity as she is mine.

She left me, her ghost to wander

- sighing around her where the stars are sleeping.

The scented twilight, I hung there.

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Author's Note

Been a while since I wrote a lengthy poem, tell me what you think.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

but you do still have a voice...even in madness, the words are so haunting in this...has that edgar a. poe feel to it...

i like that metaphor...she is my gallows...i am in her noose..and it is squeezing my pen dry---

but in my poetic death, there will be resurrection and the words sill come alive once more.

nicely written...

j.

[EllersMerry]

I absolutely adore the ending of this poem. The way that it ends so abruptly and leaves the poem hanging as well as the narrator is perfect. The way that it is repeated from earlier in the poem really hammers home the idea of insanity.
This is a very well done poem. I love the darkness and the desperation.

[Chaz Hemsworth]

I love the imagery. I also sense a very subtle pun on being "hung up" over someone or something. But that is not to detract from the seriousness. It is really beautiful in its tragedy as well.

[Shaquana Adams]

I liked how you overlapped beauty and darkness! A unique write.

[Tate Morgan]

It would be a misnomer to think she doesnt inspire . So it begs the question what are you to her ? For it is in her love of you for your own self that we find the equality of relations. May that be the case for you

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

The wonderful lapping od descriptive darkness makes on stir and moan! well done, good read.

[♥ Kinnixk]

Wow I am amazed. A beautiful poem with wonderful dark description, I love it :)

[Madison O'Dwyer]

This was an absolutely stunning submission into my Poetry Contest. Congrats on winning third place out of over 100 poems.
This was one of the first poems I read in 120 and I remembered it throughout the reading process. As I reread it while reviewing my finalist, it continued to grip me like it had on first read.
This is a stunning piece full of suspense, raw emotion, and imagery. I continue to enjoy reading it.

Thank you for entering it and sharing your piece with us, I so enjoy it.

[Poetic Beauty]

This sounds like someone who has lost the love of their life and spiraled into insanity without her. WHo knows how this persons love left/died but it haunts him with no end. I love the dark twisted descriptions in this piece for it is giving you the sight of the madness seeping deep inside this man's mind.

[Mark]

Love is most certainly a type of madness, a disease, a necessary tar baby of the human race. Your romantic ghost story was entertaining :)

[MOON]

Beautiful and poignant write Adam, great word choice