She became My Gallows

She became My Gallows

Written by Adam M. Snow

What of this!?

Her sweet madness beautiful as snow,

that by starlight, the rushes lean over her wide!

The intoxication of her insanity draws me close.

Her voice, calling out my name;

-haunting me.

 

The moonlight pours out upon her -

her wickedness is shown, who dreams with

 - a nest of mad kisses; a thousand years sad regrets.

She is my agony -

my cage -

my demise.

My loss of sanity is due her.

 

She is haunting,

such madness is this?

I cared nothing for all,

she is my breath, I can't live without.

My essence,

- sighing around her where the stars are sleeping.

The scented twilight, I hung there.

 

She became my gallows -

my wandering noose -

my demise -

the fall of a tragic poet.

She is the bearer of my heart, locked away;

I am nothing.

 

 

I am nothing

but a man locked in chains,

who bears no voice;

a victim to her madness

- her bitter sweet madness, beautiful as snow.

 

She stole my heart -

my voice -

my name.

I am her insanity as she is mine.

She left me, her ghost to wander

- sighing around her where the stars are sleeping.

The scented twilight, I hung there.

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Author's Note

Been a while since I wrote a lengthy poem, tell me what you think.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

but you do still have a voice...even in madness, the words are so haunting in this...has that edgar a. poe feel to it...

i like that metaphor...she is my gallows...i am in her noose..and it is squeezing my pen dry---

but in my poetic death, there will be resurrection and the words sill come alive once more.

nicely written...

j.

[ApKWrites]

Dark-ish/ghostly and very well written! Nice flow of the words, I really enjoyed reading it!
Thank you

[Ruth]

Intensely moving...shadowed with intoxicating bite and visceral empathy, the fallen often have fallen to such beauty, still the words weave within, enjoyed...

[Bluefire]

I like the word choice and the soft, dark chaos of this, Like a piano playing a black, twisted story instead of a happy tune.
Well done!

[Cherry Pepperweb]

I like your writing style, reminds me of the classics.
Very much enjoyed this dark and romantic piece.

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you :)

[Cherry Pepperweb]

You're welcome. : )

[Caradoc]

Excellent!

I very much enjoyed reading this one. It reads as if written in a bygone age. And the story told, ah...Isn't that how it always goes when love is found and then lost?

I also loved the title drop. Those always get me.

-Caradoc

[samiha zubair]

You are writing lengthy poems. It's good especially the part where u say that u r locked in her insanity as she is in yours is very good

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you :)

[Nightfeather]

This poem is so creative and you're writing style makes your emotions flow into the reader, for the words are so perfectly used and the thought behind this poem is deep and I really like it. You are now one of my favorite writers for a few have been able to strike the right cord in my heart. You should never stop writing for it would be a waste of eternal sweet nectar for your poem is so godly. I will tell my friends of your awesome poems, for your thoughts must be shared with the world. Believe in your writing skills until the very end, for your name shall go down in my history book as Adam M. Snow, one of the most epic writers in the world :D

[Adam M. Snow]

Wow, thank you. I've been writing poetry for 10 years and I don't plan on stopping. I'm actually even working on my first 2 poetry books, one of which is almost complete. One is going to be called 'Hanging from a Blood Soaked Tree' and the other one will be called 'The Fruits of Insanity.' Keep an eye out for them, I'll also be posting updates on here and on my website http://amsnow.weebly.com
and if you thought this poem is good, if you haven't already read me newest poem 'Weeping by the Willow Tree' I would highly recommend it.

[Nightfeather]

That explains why you are so talented and your years of hard work has paid off. I hope your books are going to be a success but I will read them first ;)
I have looked at your newest poem. It is a masterpiece :D

[Terry O'Leary]

absorbing lament...
compelling lyric...
masterful execution...
!!!

[Lyingwithlions]

Truly mesmerized by the depths of this piece. Still trying to climb my way out!
Thanks to the lines in Jacobs review, I may have a chance. :)

You have a voice in your words that I believe can not be silenced. Again you have my highest admiration.

[terry smith]

Oh the madness that swirls though our minds like a whirling wind at the moment just before death, as we take our lastbreath..at the gallows. I love reading your poetry. It is unique.