Dusk Infernal

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Dusk Infernal
By: Adam M. Snow

The quivering of a lost beating heart,
Loses it's melody, a song.
Aloft from a quivering start;
Dusk, where it belongs.
Yet naught nigh nor eternal,
Shall be forever alone,
Engulfed in life's infernal;
Bowing our heads, we atoned.
Though this heart melody cease;
We wage wars:
Triumph to the Beast
On bloodshed shores.
Our reflection's shown
in the bloodstained sands,
Of our sins alone,
Held in pierced hands.

Reviews

[Jazmen]

This is very beautiful. I've always enjoyed your style of writing since I first read your poems.
I like how this one is full of beautiful words. There's not one word that isnt poetic. The only spot I noticed stood out a little awkwardly is when you say "shores" cause its such a different word from the others. But that doesnt mean it takes away from the beauty of the poem. And your creativity. I applaud you. Nice work.
Also the Shakespearian spirit, if you will, is definitely illustrated. Your very own words make this obvious, and that level of artistic intelligence is awesome. Personally, I like Edgar Allen Poe, he inspires me in this way Shakespeare does for you maybe. Again, well done, Adam.

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you so kindly mademoiselle, for your utmost kind comments you have offered.

[pasdepoisson]

The last seven lines are a triumph- and, significantly, not to the Beast. Lines like the sibilant alliteration in "On bloodshed shores", especially when rhymed to "rage wars" are really tight construction. Also, the choice of writing "rage wars" and not "wage wars" is interesting.

Not explicitly a Christian work, though it really holds a lot of resonance with the invocation of Jesus in the final line.

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

Your cadence is always exceptional, I feel the first half of this or third of it is a return to your native poetic glory. Mr. Snow, my contest requires your presence.

[MOON]

Touching write great lines.

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you, glad you enjoyed it

[Mockingbird]

sounds tragic for mankind. very poetic.

[Coyote Poetry]

Artwork and words were amazing. I wanted to read more. Poem felt like introduction to a very good tale. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Baby Ricochet]

Classy. Should my low brow, dirty limerick eyes be gazing upon this?

[Carolann Dowsett]

Wow very moving and very beautiful. I adore this.

[Adam M. Snow]

Why thank you

[Carolann Dowsett]

Welcome :)

[kublakhan27]

A very vivid piece...I think it can be read a lot of different ways as well...well done.

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you

[saroosh]

beautiful!! words and their linkage is incredible! gr8!!