Days Gone By

As days gone by, I think of her but moments last was not forever. Her angelic face haunts me still, thinking of her makes me ill.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Days Gone By
By: Adam M. Snow

As days gone by, I think of her

but moments last was not forever.

Her angelic face haunts me still,

and without her, I am ill.

But as I leave her, but never leave her;

my feelings last forever.

I cannot part from her beauty

nor can I ever break free.

But as I love her from afar,

I wander here thus far.

To know that I had loved her;

to know that it was not forever.

I know I'll die without her name,

through this loss I'd bear my shame.

If I could do it all again,

I would do so from my heart within.

Reviews

[Danielle Nicole]

I agree with everyone else, it is lovely, it flows effortlessly, but I have a huge problem with this and I find it very hard to be somewhat mean but I mean this in the best possible way.

I don't feel anything while reading it. Yes, it is angelic and delicately written but that's all I feel about it. I don't feel the passion for this woman, I don't feel the hurt from having to leave her. It seems good from a certain perspective, everything about it is graciously detailed but it's lacking the all consuming sadness that comes from tearing yourself away from a loved one.

It is beautiful, there is no denying you that but it lacks so much personal and heartfelt passion that it becomes almost mechanical. It needs more of your voice in it, I want to know what you feel and why and I want to share those emotions with you, I don't want to clap my hands at the fact you did a, actually better than I could, decent end rhyme.

Sorry, I'm not used to being, well, not vicious, but a certain type of person I like to avoid. Don't take it super personally! It was very well written!

Danielle

[Baby Ricochet]

yes I agree, lovely.

[Heather]

very gentle and softly written from the heart. I enjoyed it

[The Refined Poet]

simply lovely...

[Jetta Zippora]

Graciously penned. Fluid, gentle, and gorgeous write, my friend. I love your writing so much. :)

[Adam M. Snow]

Why thank you my dear

[Jetta Zippora]

My pleasure, Adam. :)