I watch from the distance, as the storm covers me; pouring it's dreadful rain as the dust blinds me. I look in awe and disgrace of the thundering clouds,
A Teasing Storm By: Adam M. Snow
I watch from the distance, as the storm covers me; pouring it's dreadful rain as the dust blinds me. I look in awe and disgrace of the thundering clouds, as the storm covered plain with a pouring rain shrouds. Flash after flash would race across the sky, beauty of lights would chase the clouds floating by. The roaring songs of the wind bristling through the trees, would be enough to put even myself at ease; but no, this storm did not cover me, just a tease floating by for me to see.
I feel like we experienced the same storm... Denton I presume?... :) None the less you have great focus on the subject matter at hand here, I would say spice it up a bit and draw some cross references into the piece or future poems tell me what you see with out telling me what it is, add some mystery to keep me intrigued.
Nice descriptive view of nature though it can be allegorical in nature and create a certain imagery as to life and it's emotional hardships. As we here in Miami are expecting a Hurricane, I hope it passes over us much like your "tease"
I think this is a brilliant line >>> The roaring songs of the wind bristling through the trees,
I can just see it as you describe and the word 'bristling' is a brilliant word choice.
The whole poem is strongly observed and evocative with a strong sense of relief at missing the worst of what life has to throw at us, for now at least.
Wishful thinking? Maybe not.. Or is it a thought in terms of what you would like to happen rather than being realistic and giving a true assessment of a situation based upon the facts you saw? Either way, the poem is fantastic, it challenged my thinking though I don't like storms and lightnings:)
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