dead to you

I am dying

I am pulled down as I gasp for air        

Deep into the pain

Crashing all around me

I say one last prayer

God help me

Reviews

[vspjaguar]

A very nice piece. Just a suggestion,you could expand this piece by adding a few more lines and stanzas.

[Pawprints]

You expressed this feeling very well.

[Fang]

wow u sound like me when i'm sad, i like this poem