Good to get back

Saturn was refuting
The covered giant ball ,
Of love, truth and probity!

Rumour disease viralled
Society focused to fire
As its moony's were gullible..

After a revolution
Titan cared of lustre
Diome headed the cluster
Mimas proclaimed strikes
Phoebe was on verge of demise..!

The negotiation hunged
And master appeared
Words of wisdom,
Percolating self kingdom

Proved the ball faithful ,which
Loved the Titan most
Guided diome to host
Allowed mimas to rest
And immortalised Phoebe
It was the best attest
Of love, truth and probity..

Knitting a shape
Not including the age gape
Buycotting fellow's head ache
And flashed light in black!

Author's Note

Something new.... Hope you enjoy it?!!

Reviews

[Ted Kniffen]

I like your twist on the mythology of the Titan Wars...the writing carries a vague mystery that lends itself well to the telling of myths.
Two issues...v4 - hunged?

last verse - boycott instead of buycott.

A couple of minor things really...given the poem made one think.

[Sneh]

Thank you Ted... Good day! :)

[LylaCrystal]

Astronomy and mythology in one place. That's my gem! :)

[Sneh]

Thank you!!

[barleygirl]

I'm not familiar with Titan Wars (thanks to Ted for giving me a clue), so I can't comment on your storyline. Instead I'll tell you what I love about your writing. I love how you use unusual ways to make a point: "moony's were gullible" (vivid & interesting) . . . I love your random word play with rhyme & sounds . . . and I love how you have a laughing, enthusiastic tone, like you're clowning around as you tell this story (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Sneh]

Thanks a lot dear Margie.... 🍀

[Sawdust]

Pretty different a poem.
Loved the use of metaphors. The best part is it's ability to take shape of reader's thoughts.
In short, a great piece of art

[Sneh]

I'm glad... Thank you! :)

[Robert Trakofler]

you would get along well with my mother of whom is an astrologer you too could speak in your own language:)

[Sneh]

Great..... Would be more pleased to do that.... Thanks for the read! :)

[LitStar]

more of your elaborate wordplay

the complexity of your writing continues to impress with this


like Alice down the endless rabbit hole

where it ends....




-L.S

[Sneh]

Thanks Very much deaR....! :)