Let's play nature's game!

Bundles are leashed,
Forget to please
The ir-ready-made errors,
Consume doses to feel appeased!

Me, querying and seeking,
The eternal sophisticasy
Blank and black continued,
Took me towards literacy!

The planned, was else
Surprises exploded orderly,
Still stabilizing my art
Contributing through heart
Looking for one more
And gazing the storm from afar!

Since I transferred the lap,
A patient, qualifying patience,
Failed to comply, learned to try
Super consciously welcomed rejections.

Judgement arrived,
Results declared,
My conquest shouted from behind
I took out my soul,
Merged into the same storm,

A part of museum,
Existing with NATURE!

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the museum that exhibits the inside of the poet...yes, rejections make us stronger...patience gets our writes to where we want them...
we don't try to please others when we write...we bare our souls...we show who we are...and we exist with other poets...sharing our literacy, but being human and prone to error.
I really like this.
j.

[Sneh]

And I appreciate your kind visit.... Thanks Jacob! :)

[John the Baptist]

No disrespect meant, but I just don't understand this one.

[Vartika]

all laud and glory to this piece of writing.

[Sneh]

Many hearts .... Thanks much! :)

[barleygirl]

As an outdoorsperson, at first I was reading "nature" (in your title) to mean mother nature. Upon second reading, I realized that it would be more likely as human nature, since your poem describes a journey of feelings & impressions. Your writing feels like shorthand . . . little wisps of observations, nothing fully embellished, ideas that swirl out of you, one after another! I feel there are many more deeper feelings in this poem that I am not understanding. I think your shorthand only shows a little bit of the story & I'm not imaginative enuf to fill in the blanks. But I like reading nuanced poetry so I can get better at it (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Sneh]

Thanks Margie for the read.... And, Yes I like writing in loop...also which might increases the curiosity of a reader ..

[LitStar]

wow sneh

this is as you say


"explosive"

[Sneh]

Woah..... Thanks for the blasting review.... Lol 😁

[LitStar]

no problem