REVIVAL

Exhausted, still catching lessons from wrong,
If not I, then who'll be strong!

Mine penetrations are,
Result of that flock of sickness,
Which I utterly belong!

Thine ruthless charm,
Gigantic shackles of undesired warmth,
Whining and seeking the alms!

I contravened,
Exaggerated norms, thou did
Considered as unanimous fuss!

I realize those gypsies,
Where I was picked up from,
Letting my way,
Straight there again to regain,
Residuals of my qualitative clan!

Reviews

[Onlyme]

Interesting poem. not quite sure what your true meaning is. I pick up on a homeless person. Or mainly someone acting as though they are homeless and downtrodden, but actually taking advantage of the states, and using it to gain trust, and get sympathy, from others and get money and food. Then up and leave and go to their proper home. As they scammed them into make-believe of their situation and strive.

Or this is someone who cannot but follows the bad crowd and gets into trouble. As it gives them a buzz or joyous feeling. Into minds with this poem. Most properly barking up the wrong trees here. But interesting though.

[Sneh]

This is a story of heading towards positivity specially after having taste some bitter experiences....a kind of self motivation . I appreciate your efforts! Dear dawn ❤

[Onlyme]

Told me i was lost. ohps. might fall on that one. blushes and run off to hide.

[LylaCrystal]

The best poems are those who awaken the sense of asking oneself questions about its meanings. We may not reach a conclusion, but there's joy in this trip called exploration. Great job!

[Abhishek Izy]

Some pretty heavy words in your artistry here which is a welcome change from your other writes. The words "Mine penetrations are" got me little skeptical and I would love to know your thoughts behind it. Little confused on it.

Still I loved the flow of imagination you're getting yourself into. It's fun isn't :)

[Sneh]

Thanks Abhishek...means alot.
"Penetration" meant to get into trouble everytime..
Good day! :)

[barleygirl]

I sympathize with your reviewer Dawn, who felt bad about not being able to interpret your poem. I also find this hard to follow. I can see where your message could be a self-pep-talk & I also read some of your phrasing as unusual & difficult to guess at. I am not very good at reading nuanced poetry (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[An owl on the moon]

There is such a vibrant story that flows through your poetic music. A struggle, yet in the struggle you grow stronger. You give us all a sense of courage and hope to fight on, to rise strong, to find that place of revival from winter into the new spring. How wondrous!

[Sneh]

Happy spring......:D
Your words inspired me and really glad that i could serve you bit sense of courage ....thank you so much :)

[Neville]

She who is lost may always be found, even tho she may go round and round before reaching her destination.... I truly enjoyed these words, your poem, so aptly entitled Revival ... Neville

[Sneh]

This is what exactly happens,, get unfold at wrong time unfortunately. Thanks for the encouragement and support.....good day!! :)

[Neville]

you are most welcome my friend.. N :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Good to be a Gypsy. I have a Gypsy soul myself. I liked the thoughts and the logic of the words. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Sneh]

When amazing readers reaches depth of words and connect...thats when poetry becomes amazing!
Thank you! :D

[John the Baptist]

Has the sound of one who became involved with somebody of a different social level. The contrast caused too much pressure and finally a breakup and retreat back to the initial group. These things happen.

[Sneh]

Yes mr. john ,but when realised, it was all an illusional state of mind...thanks for taking time !! :))

[wordman]

sort of like coming out of the gutter i guess

[Sneh]

Haha, quite like .... Thank you ,Ron! :)

[wordman]

you`re welcome shen

[Chris Shaw]

I believe these lines to be about someone who has experienced some negative situations, and has become a bit lost but now seeks to remedy the situation. I felt a change of direction. Hello dear Sneh. Good to see you posting. Hope all is good with you.

Chris

[Sneh]

The ESSENCE , yes dear Chris you are damn right !
And yes everything is moving swiftly, hope you are enjoyimg life?!
Love ❤🍹
Sneh