AURA

Let love live....

It was one, when
Trembled trees choked the air
Deep water sprinkled on hair
The moment stucked as in frame
Their wings fluttered as flame
Moon was still gazing,
Stars flattered as butter praising
Warbler added background songs
To succor frame enhancing desirable Mongs!!
Idols claimed the night,
Eternally attached as love birds,
Inducing the regime of platonics very tight!

Reviews

[Robert Trakofler]

Delicate dancing in these entrancing lines and beautiful throughout! My heart did a bit of dancing hearing your song. Your word flows penetrate very naturally and the weaving very pretty in this poem and i cant help but catch your swoon and love its sentiments. You framed a great picture in my mind

[Sneh]

Thank you very much!! Your review pleased me. :)

[barleygirl]

I love the way you use lots of imagery . . . makes your poetry feel lyrical. You do a good job of SHOWing instead of telling. Your word choices are unusual . . . sometimes it works, sometimes not so much. "Trembled trees" is unusual, but works well. "Desirable mongs" seems strange to me (mongs = people with learning disabilities?) "Warbler added background songs" is great word-crafting. "Regime of platonics" seems less successful to me (regime = government or ruling group). It's better to have unusual & interesting word choices than boring ones! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Sneh]

Thanks for the insightful review, I'll be more concerned in picking words ,sure!! Have a great day 😊

[Jade]

Love this, This is so good and poetic very nicely written

[Sneh]

Thanks Brandie, your words are very encouraging! Stay happy! :)

[Chris Shaw]

I like the introduction of warblers and lovebirds in your lines. Wherever there is the sweet song of birds, then let love live there. Sweet poem Sneh. All good wishes.

Chris

[Sneh]

Nature has something which always drag me to write on. Thanks for the lovely visit!! :)
Sneh

[wordman]

let love live on in the night

[Sneh]

Yes wordman, full day-whole night :;)...thankyou very much!

[wordman]

you`re welcome

[Neville]

what a delightful poem & true... let love live and true.... :)

[Sneh]

Thanks Neville for being kind ..!☺

[Neville]

My pleasure my friend Happy New Years Eve x

[Sneh]

💐 💐 ......

[Neville]

..... N :) x

[Scott De Buitléi..]

I loved this poem, but got a little confused at "To succor frame enhancing desirable Mongs" - are 'succor' and 'mongs' local slang or something?

[Sneh]

Not slang :)
It says, when warbler with enchanting voice assists the scenario with so called lovers, The mongs are always ready to intervene....
Thanks much for your time!
Sneh

[Onlyme]

There is a beauty inside this poem. That is light, sweet and so endearing. Makes me smile and feel so good.

[Sneh]

Nothing more I want, thanks much Dawn!!
Receiving your good vibes and sending heartfelt wishes for moving into 2019... 💙
Sneh

[Onlyme]

Like wise to you and your Sneh, For the coming New Year. best wishes. Dawn.

[An owl on the moon]

There is a music that rises here, line by line, creating a sense of wonder in the darkness under the moon's mystery. Something exciting is growing in your words... and makes my heart want to stay just a little longer.

[Sneh]

Thanks much, your words are appreciated. :)

[An owl on the moon]

Please keep sharing your words with us into the new year. :)