Necromantia

Metaphorical reality / Partial fantasy.

There's this girl I know

Such a gorgeous sight

She wears all black -

Black, as the night.

She looks into my eyes

And kills me every time

I've never seen such beauty

Never of that kind.

She speaks of flowers

Dark and lifeless

I speak of eternal slumber

Endless midnight bliss.

I hope this life

We can make it through

I hope this death

Will be one with you.

Reviews

[Shadey Jadey]

Never a let down Sir, never a let down. Fantastic write from you, nothing new there :D

'I hope this death
Will be one with you'
Very nice

[John]

Star-crossed lovers, or perhaps doomed youth?
Beautiful, nonetheless.
Could use a little refining around the edges, though, I'm sure you got it under control.

[Akira Kodama]

The first draft was actually completely different, and I thought it to be much "worse" than this one. This one was written in about an hour, I suppose. Just whenever I got a good idea I would write it as the next line, then sort it. Thank you for your feedback.

[John]

no, thank you for being able to take a little feedback. Like I said, it was beautiful nonetheless. :)

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

A touch of gothic... my kinda poetry

[Monster ^.^]

simple yet compound. The metaphor is undeniable, and strong as well. Black, such a beauty indeed. It wrapped me in such dark temptation as well.

[Akira Kodama]

Thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

I speak of eternal slumber

Endless midnight bliss.
An awesome poem dear poet especially those lines.
Good job as always...

[Akira Kodama]

Thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)