She Hides in Sunlight

This is about hiding your true self from the world

Hiding in the sunlight
she watches as clouds
drag wayward shadows
across bumpy terrain

Blending into the shade
and escaping the bright
glare would be a relief

She hides in plain sunlight
dancing in shimmers of heat
hands raised like vapors

but longs for a dark reprieve

Author's Note

I intentionally did not use punctuation in this poem. Despite the last sentence about a dark reprieve this is not about suicide. Thank you for reading.

Reviews

[Creepy Swine Guy]

I very much like the poem. I like the concept of light of day representing what the rest of the world sees whereas the shadows represent a safe place to hide.

I just don't understand why you would intentionally eschew punctuation. Since you wrote the poem, you hear it perfectly in your mind's ear because you know exactly how it's supposed to sound. I struggled a bit to read the poem because I did not know where the stops and pauses were supposed to be. A common misconception is that the end of a line indicates a pause in a poem. This is not the case and so, we the reader REALLY need punctuation to know how you want us to read your poem. Think of it as a road map.

[Abdul Aziz]

I could read it well enough without punctuation. And I believe it helps in conveying the idea very well. It makes the poem feel seamless, though there are many things being conveyed here. This makes for a very engrossing, and introspective read. Great job!

[Dana Kathryn]

I like this! It is simple yet very deep and i can relate to it well!!! Awesome write! :)

[Dream Weaver]

Short but with meaning and illusion.
Flow and imagery creates this write
and propells it into the stratosphere.
nicely done..S.D.

[Liza]

i enjoyed the contrast and the search for balance -

[Awdures]

Adored this little ditty. The thought of being immersed in darkness and lost in the light. Original thinking here. Very enjoyable!

[Adelia Alighieri]

ditto Creepy Blue Guy's review; I pretty much agree at the originality of the concept. And I agree that punctuation does really help us understand it better. =)
Great work though.

[FeliciaS (Poetic Prince..]

I feel this way a lot

[Molafvt]

I would have never thought for a moment that this lovely little moment was about suicide in any way, shape or form. It is a dichotomy of sorts that "She hides in plain sunlight", but "but longs for a dark reprieve". A bit of a puzzle which provokes and stimulates one's imagination. I love this line---"dancing in shimmers of heat
hands raised like vapors"
This short, but thought provoking little biddy becomes somewhat surreal in it's presentation and execution. It's like a trick that I want to know the solution for.
Are you this much of a tease in real life? lol
Thanks for shaking up my world, Murray

[Marshall Hanson]

I really like this poem. It's very simple but very deep. I can defiantly relate.

[Crowley]

Sawheeeet...I loved the deep rich subject matter hidden in a simple yet well written design. I loved this, the images were crisp and accurate. Nice job.