At War' With- Love & Death... Where do you stand

A girl that has more problems than I can ignore,

A girl in which I adore, these feelings make me feel as if I'm at war,

Trapped inside giving myself the grand tour,

Is she the one to fight for?

I am poor, rotten to the core,

So why does she crave more?

She has always been my life rail,

My darling why so pale,

Ever so frail, is this our last tale?

Death is hard, and cold, to much for one to behold... Alone you pray for the dream to begone...... 

Author's Note

Ignore Grammar And Punctuation. :d

Reviews

[ErinLovesYou<3]

This is really well written James.. I think this one might be one of my favorites.

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I like the format. Lovely; a pouring out of emotions.

[~Lizzy♬]

I loved this poem. :) It was really awesome. The words oozed out the emotions. Wonderful job!

[stars are far]

this is emotional and great ..♥

[nothingnothingforgetfor..]

Emotionally powerful and inspiring my friend. Great work!

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

loved this... i always seem to just enjoy your writing, with such great flow, rhyme, meaning... emotion and telling... love this and enjoyed it greatly, don't know which line to choose to like but i loved how you wrote and rhymed this part with the word choices:
"My darling why so pale,
Ever so frail, is this our last tale?"
...keep up the wonderful work :)

[sarah]

This is so sad and romantic! My kind of poem great work!

[Nicky Wilson]

I like it gr8 flow and themes present. I like how love and death can exist simultaneously. That's real love an awesome write :)

[Kayla K]

Death of a loved one is something that cannot be explained in words, no matter how hard you try. However, you did a good job here, and got very close.

[Poetic Beauty]

The death of love can be quite hard and it moves you in a different direction than what you hoped for. This gets those thought out clearly.