Lifes Race

I am but a passing face, in an ever changing race, Set a steady pace or you will never reach the finish with grace,  we all need our personal space, Run explore and have fun,

even if your burdon ways a ton, Never shun for we all run for the fun,  it dosent matter who won. In the dark leave your mark, in the light take your flight, Live your life right and you just might, have a kites view of the sunlight, making everything alright

Author's Note

Ahh not my bestwork, but I liked the ring of it - ignore grammar

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Right from the start, i love the tittle and i love this first part:
"I am but a passing face, in an ever changing race,"
this says so much.
i love the word "grace" you wrote in this, and the line you wrote it in fits so well:
"Set a steady pace or you will never reach the finish with grace"
personal space is indeed needed for us all as well as fun.
I loved this line here:
"In the dark leave your mark, in the light take your flight"
so nice how you wrote it, and the ending with the "kites view" real creative i think. This is good, i like your style, and rhyming, the point you make too is so greatly said. :D

[Stormy Weather]

LOVE the rhyming scheme :D

[Lily Mae]

Making everything alright is key :) Great write..xx

[nothingnothingforgetfor..]

Wonderfully put together. I like "in the dark leave your mark, in the light take your flight" really awesome part :P. Loved it =)

[Helpless]

fabulous descriptions and expression in such a short poem. keep up the awesomeness ;)

[CharlesMonroe]

I love it :D the messgae is great and so is the imagery, it's beautiful :D

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Wonderful word play and tempo. Greatly enjoyed!

[Sarahh]

I see you put alot of time into this one! IT shows it is an amazing piece of work.. I love your rhyming scheme.

[ErinLovesYou<3]

Great imagery &Perspective. Great jobbbbbbbbbbb!

[Francesca]

I love the perspective and hope in this poem. This is really from your heart and has a lot of wisdom in it. It gives a very hopeful feeling for life :) Great poem!