Driblets

What started out as my 1st Haiku attempt...turned itself into a shape poem...although it still has the 5/7/5 going on... is there a law against 5/7/5 shape poems ? Hummm....

 

Fountain of Willow

 

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Reviews

[J. James Reider]

it isn't a haiku with the fancy shaping you did. a haiku has a 5-7-5 (I think lol) syllabic count per line.

what it is is a wonderful Shape Poem and I would leave it as it is. Even if you want it to be a haiku, I wuld write a different poem and leave this one be. It gives me a wonderfull rapids feel that will be lost if you take away the cascading letters.... terrific job (:

[Dianne]

This is just so cool! I don't care what the laws are. If they don't work for you, break 'em, or at least bend them a little. I sure as heck wont be arguing to follow the rules. lol

[HoorayForUnderdog]

I think this is not a Haiku and it is not a shape poem. It is a Hai-Shape-Ku. I'm all about the Hai-Shape-Ku. I think you are just so creative, Becca!