If I only had Love

If I only had Love

A Poem by SmittyJas
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Love in my life

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If I only had Love in my life
would thing be better the best
would there be stars in the sky to wish upon
Would someone kiss me good night

If only I had love in my life
and a starry sky looked in you eyes
I would have faith that would move mountains
And we could be happy in a small little shack

If only I had someone to love in my life
Loneliness and dispare would not follow me around
I would have you to share my heartaches and dismays
And just maybe some of the pain and the heartache would go away

If only I had love in my life
I would be kinder sweeter I meet her somewhere in between
I would show her I have a heart I want to share
And the promises I would make and never never break

If only I had love in my life
It would take away the agony and the pain
of loneliness and emptiness filling the whole in my heart
A woman A woman a kind and gentle loving woman a joy in my life

© 2014 SmittyJas


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Needs a little clarity with this one...but the meaning can be translated as I read your verse...I would go and change this --- and put the right touch in the way you wanted it to affect the reader:

If I only had Love in my life
would thing be better the best
would there be stars in the sky to wish upon
Would someone kiss me good night

If only I had love in my life
and a starry sky looked in you eyes
I would have faith that would move mountains
And we could be happy in a small little shack

If only I had someone to love in my life
Loneliness and dispare would not follow me around
I would have you to share my heartaches and dismays
And just maybe some of the pain and the heartache would go away

If only I had love in my life
I would be kinder sweeter I meet her somewhere in between
I would show her I have a heart I want to share
And the promises I would make and never never break

If only I had love in my life
It would take away the agony and the pain
of loneliness and emptiness filling the whole in my heart
A woman A woman a kind and gentle loving woman a joy in my life
---
If I only had love in my life
would things be better than best
would there be stars in the sky to wish upon
Would someone kiss me good night

If only I had love in my life
and a starry sky looked into your eyes
I would have faith that would move mountains
And we could be happy in a small shack

If only I had someone to love in my life
Loneliness and dispair would not follow me around
I would have you to share my heartaches and dismays
And just maybe some of the pain and the heartache would go away

If only I had love in my life
I would be kinder, sweeter, and meet her somewhere in between
I would show her, I have a heart, and I want to share
And the promises, I would make and never never break

If only I had love in my life
It would take away the agony and the pain
of loneliness and emptiness filling the hole in my heart
A woman, kind and gentle loving woman is a joy in my life
---

as you can see the clarity of this in the first one...needed some help...
to get the focus for the reader...
as the second one adds clarity and more refine...


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Needs a little clarity with this one...but the meaning can be translated as I read your verse...I would go and change this --- and put the right touch in the way you wanted it to affect the reader:

If I only had Love in my life
would thing be better the best
would there be stars in the sky to wish upon
Would someone kiss me good night

If only I had love in my life
and a starry sky looked in you eyes
I would have faith that would move mountains
And we could be happy in a small little shack

If only I had someone to love in my life
Loneliness and dispare would not follow me around
I would have you to share my heartaches and dismays
And just maybe some of the pain and the heartache would go away

If only I had love in my life
I would be kinder sweeter I meet her somewhere in between
I would show her I have a heart I want to share
And the promises I would make and never never break

If only I had love in my life
It would take away the agony and the pain
of loneliness and emptiness filling the whole in my heart
A woman A woman a kind and gentle loving woman a joy in my life
---
If I only had love in my life
would things be better than best
would there be stars in the sky to wish upon
Would someone kiss me good night

If only I had love in my life
and a starry sky looked into your eyes
I would have faith that would move mountains
And we could be happy in a small shack

If only I had someone to love in my life
Loneliness and dispair would not follow me around
I would have you to share my heartaches and dismays
And just maybe some of the pain and the heartache would go away

If only I had love in my life
I would be kinder, sweeter, and meet her somewhere in between
I would show her, I have a heart, and I want to share
And the promises, I would make and never never break

If only I had love in my life
It would take away the agony and the pain
of loneliness and emptiness filling the hole in my heart
A woman, kind and gentle loving woman is a joy in my life
---

as you can see the clarity of this in the first one...needed some help...
to get the focus for the reader...
as the second one adds clarity and more refine...


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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SmittyJas
SmittyJas

Pittsburgh, PA



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