Wishing to be

I’m not the best person but I try to be better, this poem is about my struggle with my “demos” in my head as I try to be better to those in my life

I wish I was a better friend
A better sister
A better daughter
A better lover
But to wish is to dream
To turn a dream
Into reality takes a lot
Knowledge
Courage
Hard work
Willingness
Practice
Knowledge to know better
Courage to take the leap
Hard work to make it real
Willingness to change
Practice doing better
I wish i could make it real
To be kind
To be loving
To be caring
To be better
I wish to be kind to my friends
Loving to my sisters
Caring for my lover
And better for my mother.
But to mold clay
Hard as stone
Is to teach
My damaged soul
How to open up

Author's Note

Let me know what you think, I love getting feedback

Reviews

[barleygirl]

The sincerity of your message can be strongly felt. Every one of us is a work in progress. Your poem conveys a few lists of aspirations & this makes me wonder if this could be one reason it feels too hard to accomplish everything in a satisfying way. Sometimes we need to attack our goals, just one or two things at a time. It takes decades to develop ourselves in all these ways. When we set things up in a way that feels overwhelming, then we make no progress at all. Having the desire is a good place to start & that’s what your poem shows. I believe you’re probably much better at most of these things than you think you are. Sometimes we judge our progress too harshly. If you’re always trying to be the best you can be in so many ways, trying too hard can mean you might end up submerging the spontaneous spirit that helps us be good people naturally, if you know what I mean. Let go & just enjoy the journey. You’ll get there eventually. I love your poem, but I had to respond to your message with some of the things I’ve learned over my long life (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Jas]

Thanks Margie, I love seeing your reviews on my poetry, you always make me feel better. Thank you

[Chris Shaw]

Realistic writing. Dreams versus, the way it is. Good thoughts though, to wish to improve your qualities. No harm in that whatsoever.

Chris

[Jas]

Thank you, I just find it difficult to change those kind of qualities I described. I struggle a lot with being a better person so I decided to express it in words.

[Chris Shaw]

Wanting to change is a good start. Try it in stepping stones. One step at a time. No need to rush. Y

[Jas]

I’ve been working on it, thank you for your nice comments

[Chris Shaw]

You are welcome.

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dreams vs reality sometimes we get lost in our dreams. thinking thats how we really are.
good write

[Jas]

Exactly, it’s hard to tell what you really feel if you’re always thinking of what you should feel. You know?