Tanka - Car Trail

A drive

Open road ahead

Clouded by trees of judgement

Drive through shoulder bends

Overbearing decisions

Travellers kill barriers.

Reviews

[dan]

There is so much deep thought enclosed within this piece; I don't have a big familiarity with tanka but you employ it so well...it is almost like espousing a philosophy and making it available to be judged by the reader. This is outstanding writing, pure and simple. Nice job! take care...dan

[Cris Roley]

I like that you seem to enjoy going on cruises (who doesn't, right? but still...) and you're contemplative about them and very observational and your practice of tying them in with your thoughts. You make it poetic, that's good. However, I know you have more to say and have witnessed more than what your pretty lines convey. Strive to dig a little deeper but make it less complex. You tell, which is great, but show, and it will be that much greater :)