Silence

The air is still like dead silence

you can hear the heartbeats

the blood rushing though the veins

the smell of uncertainty in the air

the heart beating faster making 

the blood pulsing faster with each 

breath the mind racing to where it 

cant keep up with it self 

you see fear off the waters reflection

Reviews

[Wolfwind]

This piece speaks to me of the phobia that is incurred when one in not being able to swim. I liked the imagery alot. I felt that the flow was a bit off in the second half though, as if you might have been trying to keep the lines the same length, rather than each line being one complete sentence or phrase.
Over all it had alot of potential.

Aaron

[Sarmelendez]

thank you, i was going for fear in a sence that you could not descibe it. Like when you get spooked you cant always say what you really feel in so many ways so this was just one way i can describe one of many emotions. I hope you read more of my writing

[Troy Henson]

What is fear?? It's a hard thing to write about with many of us experiencing it differently. You have captured this well Sarah. The heightened senses, the heart beating so hard it can be heard, or minds race away with the thought of fear itself. All relative to to the point of being scared.

Well done.

Regards
Troy

[Sarmelendez]

thank you i write alot based off emotion

[Troy Henson]

keep going...good stuff:)

[Sarmelendez]

thank you glad you like it

[steph.winphry]

stunning

[Sarmelendez]

thanks

[Sami Khalil]

One word : awesome...:)

[Sarmelendez]

thank you

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)