Until Came You

ehhhhh im not too sure.... the word/not-word 'ain't' is included.

I never really

Knew the feeling you get

With your feet in the sea,

But I really know

The feeling

Of when you see me,

 

Wind whiffing wonder,

Rain dashing sunder,

 

And I must say

I know the feeling of both;

 

I know the feeling

Of seeing feet

And seeing sea,

But never combining the two,

 

Until came you

 

In the wish of

Morning winter dew.

 

And ain’t it so true,

Until came you.

 

Wind whiffing wonder,

Rain dashing sunder,

 

Until came you

And I stumbled under;

And I became the thunder.

 

Reviews

[Rachel DeHart]

This is a really intresting poem.
"Until came you
And I stumbled under;
And I became the thunder."

I like those lines. The flow is kinda jagged. But it isn't a bad thing. I think it helps with the overall feeling of the poem.
Wonderful work!