Because of Late October

...started out as a creepy poem about a stalker ahahah.

He haunted her from the

         Shadow-shaded corner of the room,

         Where the light--

         Or her eyes--

Could not see him.

 

He haunted her from the

bleeding burgundy carpet floor

Of the corner,

Where he sat and

           Blended into the wall and

           Felt his heart beat through the wall and

           Pretended she would do anything but scream if she were to see him--

           But she could not see him,

           Would not ever see him.

 

He haunted her from the

           Shadow-shaded corner of the room,

           Where he was nothing more than a

           Spider crawling on the wall.

And as he watched,

He dreamed of

Being real to her,

Of touching her--

Holding her hand--

Instead of just passing through,

Reaching through.

 

As he haunted her

All he was to her

Was a sudden chill

To be blamed on the

Sharp-tempered air-conditioning.

 

As he watched her

He wept and

          Wished that

          He'd never left,

          Never drunk himself away from her and into the car

          That fateful day

          Last year

          In late October.

Reviews

[Edward Clay]

there is too much 'her' and 'he' in this poem. it feels repetitive in this sense. that's the only crit i have really.

just wondering, what does the formatting mean to you?

[justink :):)]

wow i realy like this one and for a story that started as a stalker it was very good.



justintime...................very good

[Legion]

Wow! I really like where you went with this. Great, chilling piece all the way through. A ghost stalker. You really went somewhere different here and I applaud it. Kudos Shakespearia. Or should I say Edie Alana Poe? :)

[Dressed in Poetry]

Oh wow. For starting out as a creepy poem about a stalker, I love the way it went. It's great, as well as quite sad. I love the "bleeding burgundy" bit because it kind of hints at what is to come, but the first time I read it I thought he was going to kill her, and then it ended up that he was watching in regret. I love it.

[thecoolone52]

that was good!!! I liked it alot