Breeding for War

Got motivated when i finished Vikings Season 3. Listening to the pissed off French Princess talk down to the Rolo. I got some of the words from her.

Concieved from Mother Misery
Bred from Father Hate
Beasts for Brother Pain
Devil Dogs come out to play

Cursed, spit upon, talked down on
Sacrilege, desicration are their omens of war

Wrath of a viking
Knowledge of an Athenian
Spirit of a Spartan
Sanctioning of their heart

Binding by chains for Reaper's bidding
Basking in the shadows of Death
Cringing for the ilk of bloodlust
Smiling on sinners petty
One's life in another's fangs

Author's Note

Dont mind the spelling or grammer, i dont care to hear how to fix my english skills. Now if you can give me a different play on words to help picking for other words i would appreciate that.

Reviews

[Bright Ocean Star]

wow. I can't see anything that needs fixing. It is very strong and powerful. I wouldn't change a thing. Honestly. I love it! It would be nice to know what you borrowed specifically from Vikings season 3, but it is awesome! People on here are very sensitive to potential plagiarism, so it is really good that you qualified the poem at the top. I think that is sufficient.

[Liveandletbreathe]

Nothing was plagiarized. I took words like bred and beasts. I was going to name the poem Heathens but I changed it Breeding for War. This is a huge mind set in us Grunts life.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, from misery and hate, come the vikings of war...it is the only way to get respect...through battle...

then we will no longer be spat upon.

powerful write.

j.

[Liveandletbreathe]

I appreciate the review, and I'm happy you undrrstand it.

[Einstein Noodle]

this one has strong rhyme to it ... i will guess that you didn't give it a thought ... some people have a natural sense of flow .. i enjoy mythology and the Vikings warrior spirit .. they are a rich source of color and inspiration ... the only thing i might change would to be to separate the last line .. it might lend to the emphasis on it ... and visually it may add to a sense of balance ... also you might make it a couplet and (as your second verse is) ... i am not a "gamer" so am not sure what you are referring to in your comment ... at first thought you might be a football guy .. ;) i think your poem is foreboding and powerful ... the link to current affairs makes it very relevant ... nice job says i!
E.

[Liveandletbreathe]

Thanks. I don't usually rhyme my poetry. I think it is stronger when words don't rhyme, as much as put more emphasis into the meaning of the word. I like to capture the meaning of a line with just one word instead of leading to it. Thats just my way, but I'll take in to count your review when I write my next one.
I'm not a "gamer" either hahaha. It's from a tv show on the History channel. Thanks for the review though.

[Einstein Noodle]

oops! i meant rhythm ..:}

[s y e]

It looks like I'm going to have to watch Vikings to see where this came from because wow, I want me some of this! This is completely out of this world. Everything about it is fantastic.

You know this subject is one that is close to me. I literally loved it all! The wording is so powerful and imagery so vivid. The first stanza literally jumps out at you, start of strong and get stronger and stronger and then boom, your last line is a killer!

What a poem, honestly there are no words on this earth that I can use to tell you how much I liked it. Such a strong poem, you really do have an eye for detail. Tremendous as ever!

[Liveandletbreathe]

Thanks a lot Sye! Vikings is an awesome show! If you liked this poem then you would love the show.
I was going for strong essence in the poem. I hate using basic words to describe something. So i just use one big word and it captures my entire meaning of what im trying to say.
I was hoping you would like this one. This poem has strong meaning to my life and I wanted to make it as powerful as possible. Im really proud of this one. Thanks for all your support!

[s y e]

You should be proud of all your work. This is fantastic and definitely my favourite!
Sometimes one big word is all you need - you hit the ball out of the park for me each time.
I loved it and well done again. I'll have to check out the show now!

[Liveandletbreathe]

Hahah thanks a lot! There will be more to come. Cant wait to read more of your work

[s y e]

I look forward to it.