Like Smiles

Like Smiles

A Poem by Jay

Girls are like smiles, they're beautiful, you can kiss them, and admire
them, sad truth is, sooner or later that same smile that captured your
attention is gone.

© 2011 Jay


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Nicely written, but you should lay it out a little more. Instead of putting it into three lines, maybe it would be better if you did this:

"Girls are like smiles,
they're beautiful,
you can kiss them,
and admire them,
sad truth is,
sooner or later,
that same smile
that captured
your attention
is gone"

Other than that, it's pretty nice. Keep writing ^^

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Jay
Jay

Watsonville, CA



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