Postcard from Fiji

You did not respond to my postcard from Fiji

I wrote you a poem in pristine beach sand

even the waves read it

but the tide reluctantly had to sweep over it

I drew pictures of our love

in a cave, hidden to all

but the mountain swallowed it

I wonder if my image remained etched

on the inside of your skull

I whispered longing words

right into the monsoon

hoping that they'd be swept over countless oceans

right to that very moment in time

where you are trying to forget me.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

i like the poetic wish in the closing ... maybe a little tiny pay back mixed with big hurt, wishing and wanting ... especially enjoy the scene ..its all kind of a twilight ...secluded ...alone licking wounds ... especially like the cave and monsoon ... i feel the hurt ..so well done in my books!
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[Ayvid N]

Such an ardent wish I read here, of staying etched in the heart of a beloved forever. We never want to be forgotten. This poem is as human as it is beautiful.

[SleeplessVolcano]

Thank you so much...:) I don't know why, but I always find inspiration from reviews.....love is beautiful, love is human.....where is my pencil now? ;)

[Ayvid N]

I love this I just do. Inspiration from one to another is so energizing! I'm rushing for mine too :)