Light on a string

On the wings
Of a wind-swept sparrow
She shared her soul's bright light

Off the curb
On a desert road narrow
She taught him how to fight

In the clouds
Of dreams unspoken
They flew their mutual kite.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

man oh man! i really like this one Volcano! its is sublime and so beautiful ... reads like a senryu to me .. great title, form, flow and rhyme .... enjoy the images and feelings i get from reading ..well done says i! re-read just for the pleasure of it!
E.

[SleeplessVolcano]

Thanks E! Must say I enjoyed this one too....

[Einstein Noodle]

i can see why ..funny how we have favorites of our own :} ... and its not "puffed up" :)

[V]

Your choice of words is lovely, alternating rather neutral expressions with lightly poetic ones. I particularly like the last stanza.

[SleeplessVolcano]

Thanks, Vanessa!

[V]

You're welcome. :)

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I like this. The last line kind of threw me a bit...was not expecting that.But I like kites.

[SleeplessVolcano]

I must agree with you.....the last line threw me too....though life seems to be so predictable......so I like to throw back a curve ball or two......thanks for reviewing.