Dark poem on a yellow sheet

Reviews

[Insight "MH"]

That gave me chills. Bravo on this fine piece.

Insight.

[SleeplessVolcano]

Thank you! I am experimenting a bit with off-the-wall ideas........:)

[Insight "MH"]

I Knew that there were some Mad Scientist Poets here in writerscafe, i also like to experiment. ^_^

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow this is cool...the words on the bright yellow background...dark thoughts we want to keep silent, and yet they show up even stronger, clearer, more poignant on the yellow ....like shadows in a bright sun, not being able to hide.

[SleeplessVolcano]

Thanks for the kind words Jacob.....I am teaching a poetry class once a week, so since I am completely new to teaching English, I am trying to think out of the box to make English Poetry fun to second language learners.......wish me luck....:)

[~]

Cursive is looking great SV :D
The poem sets perfectly well on this yellow paper and we feel something.. like the dark spots of the sun..

Very creative!! :D

[ANTO]

Wow - this is stylishly done SV.
The luminescence of the yellow - sun-like page - affords absolutely nowhere to hide for the words and by extension the poet (or the character). Great visual metaphor. Class piece!
:)

[SleeplessVolcano]

tx Anto....I need to improve my handwriting so shock therapy like this works well.....hehe.....
read moretx Anto....I need to improve my handwriting so shock therapy like this works well.....hehe.....
On a different note, I rarely decide to write a poem, or try to "get into character".......most of them are just the way I feel and come straight from my diary.....:)

[SleeplessVolcano]

oh please do.....but be warned.....since my previous graphologist ran away with my fountain pen collection, I may be a bit skeptical.....;)

[ANTO]

hah ... good one. lol.
First ,I need your credit card number and pin to ensure you are really you SV