This is me

I nearly drowned in the sea once
Got stuck on a mountain close to sunset
I even slept in a lonely park all night
Feeling the dew fall reluctantly on my skin

I crashed a motorcycle at the amusement park
But I've been better with cars
I flunked half my subjects as a student
But I went back in the evening and aced them all

I even survived, when my best friend and I
Fell in love with the same girl

But now, years later,
Another life, another love, I realise that the final act
Of our love is due
I choke, I don't know what to do
What to say
What to feel
What to think

All I see is the mangled up remains
Of my broken heart
Rolling down Lost Mountain
Wrecking Lonely Park
Wiping all smiles from
That amusement park
And rolling into an icy grave
At Lover's corner beach
Where we never met
And we never kissed
But know, for sure
That forever
You'll be missed.

Reviews

[FateDictates]

I love the simple honesty and real connection to this moment you created.. curtsy bow for sharing...

[An owl on the moon]

A beautiful, bittersweet glimpse over life and love... Makes me wish that time could be more kind at times... free to restore to us what we lost in the not knowing...

[Blotted Ink Productions]

Nice life story type piece...great accomplishments in contrast. Great job.

[SleeplessVolcano]

Thanks Ruslan for your review and comment!

[Matching Socks]

The one that got away will forever haunt us as the ghosts of all those 'what if' moments float in our hearts and minds. Heartfelt and lovely.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Excellent and flowing free verse with great description and raw emotions. Only fly in the ointment is the use of 'park' twice in the final stanza.

[SleeplessVolcano]

I agree.....was a spur on the moment write triggered by a challenge......I need to learn to "edit" a bit......thanks for your constructive review.

[fattycbreezy52]

Aha!A poem with a wonderful opening.
It gripped me all the way as I proceeded,the favourite part being that motorcycle thing.
I can relate.I am good with cars but motorcycles???????????????????????/(NO COMMENTS)
Everything seems to come back to the place from where it all started.Or I should better say places.Just like a circle eh?Zero Displacement;D
Okay fine,I am going a way off.
Anyway,I realised one thing-Everything can be repaired except a broken heart.You cannot mend it.If you can,I salute you:)
Loved it:)

[SleeplessVolcano]

Your comment reminds me of The Alchemist, by Paulo Coelho.....life indeed goes full circle.....about the motorcycles, I guess I need expert help.....next time I go to Goa I'll ask my taxi driver to teach me the "right way".....:D

[fattycbreezy52]

Aha!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Did you just say Goa*_*
It's an amazing place and you already know it*_*
I am glad my comment at least reminded you of someone as important as Paulo Coelho;D

[nazia]

Its an intriguing write. :)
You are one brave person to survive so much and still stand on your two feet, wondering about the past. Heart breaks are really difficult to handle but you will go past that too..

[SleeplessVolcano]

Thanks Nazia....we are all brave. Life throws all sorts of curve balls at us......either we strike out, or learn to hit home runs....:)

[Stephen]

Wow. This is a very interesting poem. I like how you started off with telling of places you have been and then at the end following it up with the same places and a description of each. but a broken heart is never fun. Thanks for sharing