Interrupted dreamer

"Even rabbits have rabbit trails"

On a pit stop between dreams
He got stuck on distant screams
Born that faithless night
His soul to hell took flight

His mind ceased to reveal
The source which pierced his heel
Pride, lust, or whatever vice
It truly was Achilles' heist.

The dart stung his exposed flesh
And took with it, his soul's rest
The wound still festers to this day
In solemn last words, he would say,

"Do not interrupt a dream at all
It would release a wrecking ball
Destroying every pillar of hope
Except that joyous, dangling rope".

Author's Note

Reviews

[nazia]

You may not be able to achieve a dream but that doesn't means all is lost. There is a whole world out there waiting for you to explore it. A class write. :)
It included all aspects of a broken dream the pain, the angst, the unfulfilled expectations. Well penned :)

[SleeplessVolcano]

Having a dream is not my problem.....having too many, is! :) But the whole wide world remains out there, and sooner or later I will find myself in the right place, at the right time :)

Thank you for your review!

[nazia]

You will definitely figure out the right one when the time is ripe :)

[gabrielle]

i do admire the rhythm and the rhyme scheme applied in this piece. The theme may be gothic or dark but the narration gave me "classic-feel". The failure to achieve our dream will sometimes lead us to darkness. But nothing can stop us from building another dream. :)

[SleeplessVolcano]

Indeed, darkness is inevitable.....but we need to always move towards the light :).......Good to have many irons (dreams) in the fire! Thanks for your comment!

[~]

I don't know if the song was inspired by your poem or your poem by the song.. but both are gut-wrenching.. your words pierce through any heart that reads it.

[SleeplessVolcano]

It was a tough write.....but life cannot always be downhill, can it? :).....thanks for allowing my words to pierce your heart.....

[~]

It's always a pleasure to dive in your poems my dear!!!