What
is life? I meanwhat is the real purpose? We
live, we die. But what is in between? Life is probably the most confusing
concept known to man.
"Paige." said my mother peeking into my room "lights
out." I didn't answer. This didn’t bother my mom because I never spoke.
She looked at me, probably waiting for an answer but was disappointed (as
usual.) She pulled her head out of the doorway and shut it. I was left alone in
my room. I sat on my bed and felt out of place. Tears began to roll down my
face. For crying was common for me, even my sobs were silent. I never made a
sound.
Slowly I fell off the bed and curled up into a ball on the carpeted
floor. The floor smelled of lavender and other perfumes that were in the room.
My mom always lit a couple of scented candles to make me feel calmer. It
worked, sometimes. My tears soaked down into the purple carpet.
Then I heard a
voice in my head, Oh baby. Please don't cry. I shot up like a rocket and
looked around. No. It wasn't possible! I knew for a FACT she was
gone. And yet I could still hear her sweet voice cooing to me in my ear.
The tears rolled faster and faster down my face. I felt scared again. I grabbed
my pillow from my bed and dragged it to the corner of the room, right below my
window. I dropped the pillow down on the floor and plopped on top of it. The moonlight
shone down on my face, revealing my tear streaked face. I felt the moonlight
bore down into me, peering right into my soul. I turned my back on the view, for
it reminded me to much of her. I let the tears fall to the corner of my
mouth, and outline the line of my lips. The taste of tears was salty and wet. I
shut my eyes and heard the moon's lullaby in my head. I shine down on my children,
lighting the way to happiness.
Protecting them. I am the light
that breaks through the nightmares
I will always show my children the way.
Oh this is nice. =^.^= I like it alot because, it reminds me of how my life used to be. And even now, my life is still like that but, a little better because of my friends. Anywayz, I enjoyed reading this, you did a good job on writing this. You deserve to get this turned into an actual book one day. :)
Its nice, sets off the mood quite well. The only problematic sentences are around the mothers dialogue. Look through them i think they can be worded better.
really good. needs a little proof readingthough. "mother" dosnt need to be in quotations. it could also use a little more detail to really draw in your readers. great plot and a good write=)
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