Monday 5:30pm

this is the Journal entry by Jade in "The Messed Up Life Of Jade Porters"

Dear Diary,
       My name is Jade Porters. Please just call me Jade. Okay I want to set one thing straight....I was FORCED to get this "diary" by my mother. Well my shrink suggested I should "get my feelings out in a positive way." But let me set another thing straight, this isn't a pink fluffy diary that says "diary" on the cover in fancy gold letters. I mean on those things instead of printing "diary" on the cover they might as well print "please read me!" My mom probably wanted to get me one of those things! (Yuck!) No instead I decided on a medium sized black book with a skull design on the cover. I also used my lock from my money box. The key is around my neck used as a choker. Okay this is the last thing I want to set straight, I'm not going to pretend I have some ultra ego life where I act mad and lonley on the outside but really on the inside I'm happy and full of life! Because then I would be lying! Nope I'm sad from the inside out! Mostly because...MY LIFE SUCKS! Some people say they have hard life, well come live with ME! Thats probably why I'm on meds! And thats probably why I cut my wrists almost everyday! Gotta go the b***h is calling me for dinner! Another night of food poisining....Great!

                            _Jade

Reviews

[Nontani]

I like the charaterization of the girl...she's edgy. On the other hand, I think you went a little overboard with the whole "I'm a b***h who wants to kill everyone" kind of mindset. It doesn't seem quite fitting for someone who cuts...and before you try to discredit me, I DO know what that's like. Sure, she probably has serious anger issues relating to her family and the shrink and drugs (anyone would, really) but it seems a little too melodramtic.

[Bridget Mcmaken]

I like how this starts out wonderful chapter. Right down to the point.

[Calypso]

Nice beginning

[Blue]

Wow loving this character. Only cause the fact she truly shows herself in her "diary" and not let lies slip in there like some people. She's an interesting character. Just by reading this piece I wonder what hell she is living. Thank-you for sharing!
J

[Miss Coral]

Emotional, but a bit cliche. Could be a good start, but could squander its potential. Good luck.

[JustJordan. x3]

good start. its good to laet your emotions out though,.. you may not think so but it helps.

[Prateeksha Khot]

interesting start. would love to find out more

[WriterSki7]

Lol. Seems more of a rant than a story. So far it's . . . well, just a diary entry. What's worse, it's a fantasy diary entry; made by a character that doesn't exist in the real world so unless there's a story that follows this it's really just getting nowhere . . . (checks*) Yep, there is a story behind it. Thank God. An interesting way to open a book to say the least.

[Katseye]

Interesting idea for a story. I'm looking forward to see how this plays out.

[YouoweYoupay]

Sounds like a typical, unstatisfyed teen to me. Looks interesting though. I'd like to knw more about her future plans and thoughts.