No longer my friend

I don't care if you stab me in the back

I always knew you were never a true friend

You always went around sayin

I'm your best friend am like a sister to you

well I'm letting you know

I don't fall for it

You're full of crap

And i don't believe a word you say

 

I would never do that to you

or anybody else

I'm a true friend to everyone

I don't go around fighting for no reason

i love the peace and sweetness

Of friends and hate the drama

I no longer care for youy

I wish for the best

And god bless you hoipe you grow up

off your childish ways

I might be a 14 year old but i have plenty of mind

and feelings.

Reviews

[Speak in Silence]

This is very powerful, good luck :)

[Ian Faraway]

Try to get creative with this layout. It's just so...plain? Rewrite the fourth line down, doesn't read well. Spelled 'you' wrong in the second stanza. A lot of the 'I' s should be capitalized and not lowercase. 'Hope' is spelled wrong. It would flow better if you used 'grow up out of your childish ways' instead of using 'off'.

[freelancejouster]

line four feels like it's missing a word.
the simplistic language used feels childish. i don't care if you're fourteen, poems have more power the more powerful the words used.
the fourth to last line you have "hoipe"

i feel like it switches from anger to defending yourself midway through, which could be a good or bad thing depending on what was intended.
i like the honesty in this and with a little polishing, i'm convinced it could turn into something powerful and more than the rant.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the honest and direct feel of this poem. Sometime we must stand our ground and fight for the right. I like the complete poem. A strong ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a good way to vent your emotions but read more like a letter than poetry.

[jennifer little]

very honest poem i have had friends like this and its dum and sucks friends that use you and dont care and stab you in the back wonderful poem loved reading it great job keep up the good work

[Cameron]

Very Honest...I like it how simple it is. It expresses those feelings perfectly.