I'm ready to kill

Darkness is coming

Night is here

I might be tired but

thirst is here

 

I'm ready to kill

 

Night is my love

Night is my trust

 

Cannot wait until he screams away

This is the true me

so you better stay

I dont bleed

But my heart speaks

 

I'm not going to hurt you

I'm just putting you to sleep

You might never wake

 

But atleast i fed

I'm ready to kill

so lean back this will only hurt

a smitch

 

Thanks for filling me up

Is too bad all your blood is gone

You were good and tasty

Like a chocolate cake

 

I'm done for today

But not until tomorrow.

 

Author's Note

Hope you get it and like it.
romantic right? lol Just kidding.
Enjoy.

Reviews

[freelancejouster]

the metaphors didn't always fit "good and tasty like a chocolate cake?"
"i'm done for today but not until tomorrow" doesn't make any sense.
and though you're not rhyming, there isn't really a rhythm to your poem.
to better yourself, i'd suggest playing with different words, themes, and poem structures, because it feels like you're stuck in the same subjects and format.
keep working :)

[Drowning with Stars]

I'm usually not a huge fan of vampire stuff, but I like the way you described the night, as love and trust, like safety. That really caught my attention :)

[Coyote Poetry]

No romance in this poem. Just a hungry beast seeking pleasure in blood. I like this poem. Short and direct to the punch. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote