The time i wasted

The time i wasted

A Poem by Sunny Skye

You think you so good

You say you made me famous

But I did it on my own

I got knocked down

And I stood back up

 

You think you got money

Look at my stacks

Should have stayed by my side

All this time you was trying to figure out

How to bring me down

When you could’ve waited

You would’ve been on top

With me

Yet you talked s**t

Now I look back and say

“Damn the time I wasted”

© 2012 Sunny Skye


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Sunny Skye
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“Damn the time I wasted”
The above words we will say many times in a life. Would be nice to know the ending before we begin. But we don't. Mistakes are just education to make us wiser. I like the strong thoughts and very good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Sunny Skye

12 Years Ago

Thank you



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Interesting, to say the least, I must say.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Sunny Skye

12 Years Ago

Thank you
“Damn the time I wasted”
The above words we will say many times in a life. Would be nice to know the ending before we begin. But we don't. Mistakes are just education to make us wiser. I like the strong thoughts and very good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sunny Skye

12 Years Ago

Thank you
Damn very Kurt and Courtney

Posted 12 Years Ago


Sunny Skye

12 Years Ago

LOL?
I like the honest emotion here, but the poem seems a bit too one dimensional. There is resentment here, towards someone who didn't believe in the Speaker's ability. But there is always more to these emotions than just the response. Why was there doubt? What s**t was talked? I like your poems, but this one needs some imagery added, and I would re-tweak some of the words to be more visual and expressive.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Sunny Skye

12 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and i will look into what you said.
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:o Oooooh those regretful moments people experience, nice poem :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


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While wasting time sucks, when you find the phonies you get angry and you feel hurt, don't get to bitter. That time wasn't really wasted, because you took that to learn. Why not wish education on others instead of rubbing in outcomes. Look at it like I try to:
Hey, I thought you were great. You aren't. That sucks. I learned from this experience. I hope you learn from something too, not that I care to be around you, you proved that I cannot be trusted.

"You think you so good"- should be
You think you're so good

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Sorry thing is that I definitely have people in my life that I feel were a waste of time as well.

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