So tired

So tired

A Poem by Sunny Skye
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Just something that came to mind

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So tired of hiding

So tired of pretending and ignoring

So tired of your lies and betrayals

My dear friends, boys, and girls

I’m so tired of the lies

So tired of goodbyes

 

Don’t pretend to be better

To impress me or them

Don’t act cool

Because you look like a fool

Don’t say hi because

They’ll think you’re un-cool for knowing them

 

So tired of betrayals

So tired of goodbyes

So tired of pretending and crawling

 

Baby please I don’t lie

Believe me I’m tired of the lies

I’ve never lied to you so,

Don’t lie to me

Or one day I’ll just leave.

© 2012 Sunny Skye


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Sunny Skye
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Ees
hmmmm, maybe you should leave. Haha, good use of emotion and repetition in this one. The second stanza gets a little bit confusing because of your phrasing in the second to last and last lines of that one. I also feel like you could have used a different word besides fool to rhyme with cool, because that seems like such an obvious choice.
Anyway I think that this is a good poem, the concept and style were executed well, good job, have fun,
and remember, don't ever stand for anybody's lies. Call 'em out if you have too!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sunny Skye

12 Years Ago

Thank you and i appreciate the comment.
Ees

12 Years Ago

No problem. Great job!



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I enjoyed the poem. I dislike liars too. I rather have the truth and accept the consequences. Nice flow of thoughts leading to a very good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sunny Skye

11 Years Ago

Thank you for reading & commenting.
What a dreary piece for someone calling themselves Sunny Skye but brutal and raw emotion is what we need for a good write and it is indeed well done

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Sunny Skye

12 Years Ago

Thank you and my real name is Sunny Skye so i have to call myself that lol but thanks for the commen.. read more
J. Viands

12 Years Ago

Nice sweet name
Sunny Skye

12 Years Ago

Thank you
I enjoyed reading this poem. My suggestion would be to interject a bit more vocabulary. For every word that is in general common use, such as 'cool', 'pretending', 'fool', 'betrayals', there is a more descriptive word, or a word that contains more mental imagery, emotion, etc. What I love is the emotional content.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sunny Skye

12 Years Ago

Thank you for the review and i'm glad you liked it. I will look into what you said about the vocabul.. read more
I really like this, great job :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Sunny Skye

12 Years Ago

Thank you, glad you liked it
very very nice

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Sunny Skye

12 Years Ago

Thank you
I can tell you really felt this poem. Its just a shame the people feel they have to lie to get by in the first place. Its so much easier just to tell the truth


Posted 12 Years Ago


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Sunny Skye

12 Years Ago

I agree and i did feel this poem very much, i got sick today of one of my friends saying the biggest.. read more
Ahmad Cox

12 Years Ago

Thats really good. Sometimes people have to be called on it to realize what they are doing and if he.. read more
Sunny Skye

12 Years Ago

It's true, i agree with you. Thanks do.
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Ees
hmmmm, maybe you should leave. Haha, good use of emotion and repetition in this one. The second stanza gets a little bit confusing because of your phrasing in the second to last and last lines of that one. I also feel like you could have used a different word besides fool to rhyme with cool, because that seems like such an obvious choice.
Anyway I think that this is a good poem, the concept and style were executed well, good job, have fun,
and remember, don't ever stand for anybody's lies. Call 'em out if you have too!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sunny Skye

12 Years Ago

Thank you and i appreciate the comment.
Ees

12 Years Ago

No problem. Great job!

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