gone prayer- rate please, only 14 go easy.

lollz, idk, just read it, its short

Gone prayer
i wish you well, 
you gave to me what i gave to you, 
You stole from me what i stole from you, 
You saved me from becoming what vile creature I could’ve become  
You yanked, endlessly at my worthless soul untill it disapeared, 
and as life began to shrink away, 
You gave it back, 
watching me as i stood there, 
sparing me from what i had become,
from what murdered me,
From what gently reminded me of pain,
of hate,
of what I used to be; 
an burnt leaf, 
praying, perhaps, for freedom, 
for her tears to be melted, 
for isolation to disapear into nothing more then what pitiless being created it.

Author's Note

ignore grammer problems. how do you think the flow is, can u help me with it, cause its the first time i had trouble with it...

Reviews

['poetry by bonnie']

I just saw your age 14, you did wonderfully, i'm impressed to, write in that depth at such a young age! keep writing, you will go somewhere.......

['poetry by bonnie']

I thought you did quite well, it got the point across of dying or death, what inner pain you had gone through...the inner struggles that were still there....