The Fates' Thread

Remembering my sister whose life was cut much too short.

The Fates’ Thread

Long ago your thread was measured

And your life you did begin

By your parents you were treasured

To your siblings a good friend

 

As you grew, your life was rich

Filled with fun and joyfulness

An angel with a crooked halo

Eyes of blue and hair of sable

 

The Fates did not foresee

The Fates, they did not plan

That your thread would not be

A single string, a single strand

 

But, instead it became a web,

Intertwined with each life you touched

Spreading out, it did not ebb.

Stronger made, by love’s clutch

 

When you were just twenty four

The Fates cut short your thread

So while it no longer grows in length

It did not disappear

It is already woven through

The webs of those that hold you dear

 

-In our hearts and memories you shall live on!

 

Author's Note

There's a bit that I'm still not happy with- I feel like there should be another stanza between the second and third to make a better transition. Also not sure if I like that the last stanza doesn't follow the same rhyme scheme.

As always any thoughts, criticisms and comments are welcome

Reviews

[S.R.M.]

This is beautiful! Your feelings really shine through and the overall effect of the poem is really powerful. You're a very talented writer!

[Sharon Kim]

Thank you! You are too kind!

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem. Myth and tale is my favorite. The Fates are a interesting three. Have the power of life and death. Powerful women. I like the story in the poem. Some wisdom too. Better to create love and kindness so you will not be forgotten. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Anand Sehgal]

A journey that ended before having the real flourish. A riveting write. I really liked the strong emotional touches.
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[Sharon Kim]

Thank you for your kind words Anand!

[Briana O'Connor]

This very beautifully written. The metaphor brings even more emotion to this piece. I think you may be being a little hard on yourself. I like the poem just as it is. I do the same thing though. Thank you for sharing and keep up the good work!

[Sharon Kim]

Thank you Briana! I'm more often than not my harshest critic!

[Briana O'Connor]

I have the same problem!

[Moon]

This is a lovely poem. The impact that we have on others can last a lifetime.

[Sharon Kim]

Thank you, Hayleigh! You are so right! Both positive and negative impacts can last a lifetime.

[Rita L. Sev]

This is a beautiful and heartfelt tribute, Sharon. I like the analogy here, too. We are all interwoven...

[Sharon Kim]

Thank you, Rita! It's great to have some time to spend writing and catching up. :)

[Alfred Kukitz]

The crooked halo sweet as the voice who wrote these lines. I felt as though you were right there with her even though she was gone.

[Sharon Kim]

Thank you for your kind words!