Cupcake the Friendly Hamster

An Anecdote

When I was seven, I began a phase in my life where I had hamsters. My favourite was Cupcake. She was feisty and grumpy. Which is what I look for in everything; pets, friends…okay maybe not pencils.

I thought Cupcake was lonely so I went outside to fetch her a new friend. I lived in America at the time, so there were all sorts of small creatures hidden in the blades of grass. I found a green little frog. He looked nice and felt smooth to the touch. I picked him up and placed him opposite to her in the cage.

Cupcake really liked him - she grabbed him straight away. I thought, ‘yay she’s going for a hug!’ Instead, she bit his head off. Then, she started eagerly eating him. I scooped Cupcake up into my hands while she stuffed her face. I had to show someone. Unfortunately, my parents were eating dinner with their friends. Oblivious to the fact that they may not want to see a bloody half eaten frog with his guts out, I showed them. My parents told me, ‘We’re eating! Take it away.’ I didn’t understand what the problem was. I thought it was cool.

Author's Note

What do you think? Honest opinions please.

Reviews

[Kieta!]

Yikes! I feel bad for the frog :D Great job with the story!! :) :)

[Cynthia Ann Varady]

This is such a great story about how a 7 year old thinks. There are a few grammatical errors, but the narration is clear, concise, and straightforward. This is a great bit of flash writing.

[Persona]

Thank you Cynthia. Can you point out where the grammar issues are?

[Cynthia Ann Varady]

In the first line of the second paragraph there is a quotation mark instead of a comma or semicolon.
Pardon the plural comment, I only see one grammatical error.

[Persona]

Yeah, I don't know why but when you copy and paste from word that always happens.

[Cynthia Ann Varady]

Hidden formatting can be such a pain. Sometimes I have to copy and paste stuff into a text editor, which removes all hidden formatting, before I paste it into something like Wordpress. Depending on the length of the piece, it can take way too long to find all the wonky things Word has thrown in.