Without You

Without You

A Poem by Jake
"

For Stormi.. my ex

"
I can't sleep at night
knowing your not alright
Wanting to hold you in my arms
and keep you away from any harm

Even if were not together anymore
I still want to see you more
Your smile makes my day
without you, my skies are grey

© 2011 Jake


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:D luv it

Posted 12 Years Ago


nice, i love this

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is really good. like your rhyme scheme

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nice,..reminds me of the short story by Del James "without you"...on which the epic ballad 'November Rain' by band Guns n Roses was based.

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Short and sweet. The first two lines are your best in my opinion, they speak of a kind soul if I say so myself. I think you can expand on this, don't be afraid to test yourself and simply spit out whatever comes to mind.

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Aww this is so sweet

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Aww that's adorable. I really like it.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Delightful.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this, its adorable and sweet. love the write adding it to my favorites :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Awe so cute. Good write. :D

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Jake is the name, skating is my game. :P I joined because my bff Stormi said too. :D So I did, I am here aren't I?! I skate. I draw. I ride dirt bikes and other dangerous stuff. :F more..


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