I really wouldn't mind....

I really wouldn't mind....

if my breath would slow down to a halt,

my heart to stop beating completely,

for my depression to not see another day,

to sleep forever in a coffin...

cause at least I'd finally be at peace.

 

No, I truly wouldn't mind...if I lied down for one last time and didn't wake up.

I would love to take a final breath and DIE.

Reviews

[beautiful dreamer]

wow this is dark! but very rhythmically pleasing with good structure and message behind the words. can tell you wrote from the heart and thats the best kind of poetry! but please don't DIE we'd miss you!

[Dreamer]

thanks for your review fellow dreamer!

[Mockingbird]

conveys such pain and despair. it sucks to suffer from depression.

[Dreamer]

indeed it does. thanks for your comments

[BubblingMe]

Wow this is very deep and dark, well written

[Dreamer]

thank you, I tend to write a lot of dark poems

[Laura Harrison]

You seem to write a lot of dark poetry. If you ever need someone to talk to about it, I'm always here :)

[Dreamer]

thanks I appreciate it, and yeah that seems to be mainly what I write about.

[Vidya Bacchus]

you sound soo sad and frustrated, be strong and keep writing because it helps alot and you are very good at it.

[Dreamer]

thanks, I appreciate it

[Vidya Bacchus]

you are welcome

[Inda]

Great piece, proves you should stick around!

[Dreamer]

thanks.....

[Patrick O'Neil]

Wow,,you might not mind, but the rest of us will surely miss the writing. Stay strong , great write.

[Dreamer]

thank you..

[David Burke]

Don't do that you have a beautiful soul kido :) and a wonderful sense of emotion in your work great job

[Dreamer]

Why thank you, Ryan! (:

[David Burke]

You're welcome :)

[Dreamer]

I appreciate it :D

[koty bell]

Very sad noone deserves to feel this way...great write

[Dreamer]

I agree, sadly a lot off people do feel this way though...
Thanks for your review, Koty

[koty bell]

I know doesnt make it right tho... :-( no prob

[Dreamer]

No, it certainly doesn't :(

[Chris]

You put the power in the words...

has the feel of real.

Damn, we do get so tired sometimes. Thing get so close and tight. Noise and silence - both at once. Being tired is easy... getting up is the biatch.

[Dreamer]

very well said, thanks for your comments.

[Chris]

anytime... take care

[Dreamer]

thanks, you too