Desolate Love

My heart now tattered and torn,

our love now being forlorn...

The feelings we shared now bleak,

It's safe to say we're done now and the hopes we had together have vanished for good.

 

 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Honest and direct thoughts in the poem. When the love is gone. Hard to find again. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[BubblingMe]

WOW I love it

[Dreamer]

thank you, im glad you enjoyed it

[David Burke]

I think everyone has been there before, good job kido

[Dreamer]

Thank you very much, Ryan!

[MikeV]

Brutal! I loved the read, but i read some other comments
cheer up. I love your writings very much, but it sucks that the emotions you speak
are true and youre living in hell
Cheer up my friend :)

[Dreamer]

Thank you very much, I'm glad you like them (:
and it is true, I am living in hell..
Thanks for your comments!

[OTownPete]

Wow, somebody really needs to find a way out of the negative funk they wallow in. Your friend in words, Pete

[Dreamer]

It's rather hard to wallow in the negative with the life I live..

[OTownPete]

Everything I have read from your pen has had a negative overtone to it.

[Dreamer]

Yeah, that's because there is nothing positive in my life to write about

[beautiful dreamer]

the title works well with the text! great titling! i love that its short but gets the point across simply and effectively, theres nothing i hate more than feeling confused after reading a poem. great work!

[Dreamer]

Thanks so much for the positive review!

[beautiful dreamer]

you are so welcome!

[Dreamer]

Its very much appreciated!

[Sami Khalil]

"The feelings we shared now seeming bleak,

It's safe to say we're done now and the hopes we had together have vanished for good."

Short but powerful...:)

[Dreamer]

Thank you Sami

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Dreamer]

I appreciate you reading it! (:

[Sami Khalil]

^^~^^ :)..........

[bobc]

D...have you tried it without '...being...', '...being now...', '...seeming...' from the first 3 lines. I'll leave the last line for you...bobc

[Dreamer]

Thanks for the suggestions

[Dreamer]

This isn't really done yet, it's still in the thought process but suggestions and reviews are encouraged (: