Weight on my Shoulders

" The weight on my shoulders is heavy,

 it's pressing down on me hard.

 Don't know how much longer I can stand my ground,

 don't know when the weight is going to pull me down. 

I'll find my inner strength so I can remain standing tall,

 and that weight on my shoulders will not make me fall"

 

-Dreamer

Author's Note

Reviews are encouraged (:

Reviews

[OTownPete]

You have no idea just how much I can relate to the words and sentiment of this piece. We don't always know where the resolve will come from but we somehow continue to fight the good fight. Your friend in words, Pete

[Dreamer]

Thanks for taking the time to read it, I appreciate your review

[OTownPete]

Your certainly welcome.

[beautiful dreamer]

try stanzas! they help! i like the structure for one poem (free verse) but with one like this with a rhyme
scheme it helps to see the structure and how you're words fit together with breaks. its like a paragraph with no punctuation in a paragraph it gets confusing! but i love the words and the overall theme! keep up the good work!

[Dreamer]

Thanks for taking the time to read it and for your suggestions.

[beautiful dreamer]

you are welcoome sorry for double letters llol i'm shivering something fierce its so cold in here!

[Dreamer]

I changed the structure so it has stanzas now. The way it was written in my notebook it had stanzas but I was in a hurry when I typed it but I fixed it now.

[beautiful dreamer]

cool :) it looks great!

[Dreamer]

Why, thank you kindly! (:

[beautiful dreamer]

you're welcome

[Dreamer]

I appreciate you reading my poems! (: