Come and Stay a while longer

Romance - my favourite genre. :)

Come and stay with me a while

A moment longer than you would

To try and catch 

another fleeting eternity

 

Come and stay with me a while

A moment longer than its needed

So I can drift away

Into miles and miles and miles

Of hazy unrealities

We will create

Someday...

Someday...

 

Come and stay with me a while

Can I hold you back a moment

Long enough

To tell you

Why even walls can make me smile

Why the end of every sullen day

Is a promised night

Of a free one way ticket

To our private paradise

Why I don't want to land back

And face the sight

Of an empty bed

And an empty house

And miles and miles and miles of measured land

Holding us apart

 

Come and stay with me a while

If only for a moment

If only in my mind

Let us live another eternity

Before its time for another good-bye...

Author's Note

Inspiration : "Half Of My Heart" by John Mayer ( http://youtu.be/fnHHUWs4CgU )

Reviews

[Ian Faraway]

The repetitiveness of some of the lines definitely made this poem more powerful. I enjoyed every line, too. The relate able desires and dreams. The wanting of just a single grain of sand to just stop before it passes through the hour glass so you can enjoy the moment with that someone. I know all too well but haven't experienced at the same time. J'adore! -Ian

[Santiago Veracruz]

quite cliche, in my honest and sincere opinion. But I do enjoy your perspective and I appreciate you writing this.

[Hisou_Tenshi]

It's a wonderful poem. I have this sort of feeling the way I am now.
No offense to your poem, but I kinda wanna sling it in a certain person's face (I wouldn't be brave enough to hand it outright) and see if he understands.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

"Let us live another eternity

Before its time for another good-bye..."

raw and passionate work...

[Sami Khalil]

Nice poem. Heartfelt emotions.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

now this in itself is a beautiful song........

[Autumn]

Beautifuly written, so full of emotions happiness and sadness at the same time. I felt my heart crush reading this poem as I can really relate to that situation. You are very talented! Bravo

[Muse]

Every line made me stop...breathe...and pause. You created a lovely moment that every reader wants to enjoy again and again. Like a good bear hug...lets hug awhile longer. :)))))

[VinoVenitas]

I liked this piece the repetition gave it that little bit extra, especially the last stanza made it wonderful


Come and stay with me a while
If only for a moment
If only in my mind
Let us live another eternity
Before its time for another good-bye...

that right there made it classic keep it up

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Very nice write, I love the romance in this. The feeling in it, just wanting to be with that someone.